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She Walks Forward

Post by Unit7 on Fri Jul 02, 2010 8:06 pm

She waits down by the water
as the ocean sweeps past her feet
she looks down,
and wonders many things.
She lifts her head to see
the truth that never was

Slowly she walks forward
she can feel the cold ocean
biting at her skin
She walks forward
and as the water rises
she wonders something
She can taste the salty water now
she spits it up
so she can walk forward some more
deeper and deeper she walks
until she can't breathe anymore
and then she walks forward anyways


So, do you understand the metaphor?

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by Hannah_Banana222 on Fri Jul 02, 2010 10:41 pm

Dude, that's hardcore. I dig it.
To me, she's basically just buried in deep shit and can't take any more of it, but she just keeps piling it on. She's just so overwhelmed with life, but she's not doing anything to help herself. She keeps staying busy, possibly to hide her pain.
Or something completely different that I'd love to hear. Smile

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by Unit7 on Fri Jul 02, 2010 11:49 pm

meh I guess. To behonest I just simply had the line 'she waits down by the water' and just decided to write a poem one line at a time. It took me all of like... 5 minutes or so. lol

The idea is that life isn't easy. The ocean itself has been protrayed as an untamed beast and being relentless. Life is an untamed beast, its relentless its cruel. But she moves forward anyways even when she experiences the idea of 'not being able to breath' she continues to move on.

Though to behonest I only made that connection as I was finishing the last couple lines and changed the title from 'She waits down by the water' to 'She Walks Forward'

Your interpetation is also great. I think above all else what would make a good poem is what different people can take from it. It doesn't have to be so straight forward. Sometimes its best to allow the reader to figure out what it means to them.

But I figure what I had envisoned, and what you took away from it, are relatively close.

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by Unit7 on Sat Jul 03, 2010 7:39 am

*sniffle sniff*

Why has no one else read it. Sad

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by Rex on Sat Jul 03, 2010 6:32 pm

Unit7 wrote:

So, do you understand the metaphor?
She really really needs to pee but she is too embarrassed that the other people on the beach will see her ?

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by Unit7 on Sat Jul 03, 2010 6:47 pm

Rex wrote:
Unit7 wrote:

So, do you understand the metaphor?
She really really needs to pee but she is too embarrassed that the other people on the beach will see her ?

omg you are so correct!! :O

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by Rex on Sat Jul 03, 2010 6:53 pm

I knew it ! Of course the fact that I had to pee myself maybe inspired some of my interpretation....

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by pinkcupcake on Sun Jul 04, 2010 3:52 am

AMAZINGGG. I had basically the same interpretation as Hannah (:

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by Unit7 on Sun Jul 04, 2010 3:57 am

pinkcupcake wrote:AMAZINGGG. I had basically the same interpretation as Hannah (:

Seems like everyone has that impression. I posted it on the writing forum I go to and someone basicly said that was her interpetation.

But it was a more broad one really. But then maybe that IS the interpetation afterall and I am the one to has it off, if only slightly? lol

Thanks. Though now I have to wonder if you truly are biased. I mean I just wrote one line after another with no real thought. lol

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by pinkcupcake on Sun Jul 04, 2010 4:01 am

Unit7 wrote:
pinkcupcake wrote:AMAZINGGG. I had basically the same interpretation as Hannah (:

Seems like everyone has that impression. I posted it on the writing forum I go to and someone basicly said that was her interpetation.

But it was a more broad one really. But then maybe that IS the interpetation afterall and I am the one to has it off, if only slightly? lol

Thanks. Though now I have to wonder if you truly are biased. I mean I just wrote one line after another with no real thought. lol

*Sniff sniff fold arms* You think I'm lying to make you feel better? Sad

But seriously, it WAS great! Very deep.

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by Unit7 on Sun Jul 04, 2010 4:05 am

pinkcupcake wrote:
Unit7 wrote:
pinkcupcake wrote:AMAZINGGG. I had basically the same interpretation as Hannah (:

Seems like everyone has that impression. I posted it on the writing forum I go to and someone basicly said that was her interpetation.

But it was a more broad one really. But then maybe that IS the interpetation afterall and I am the one to has it off, if only slightly? lol

Thanks. Though now I have to wonder if you truly are biased. I mean I just wrote one line after another with no real thought. lol

*Sniff sniff fold arms* You think I'm lying to make you feel better? Sad

But seriously, it WAS great! Very deep.

No of course not!

Well I am glad you think so. Smile

Though its no where near as amazing as your poetry. They actually have a nice rhythm(sp) and flow with wonderful imagery. If mine is great, then yours is beyond brilliant. Smile

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by pinkcupcake on Sun Jul 04, 2010 4:17 am

Okay good xD

Very Happy


Awwww that meant sooo much for you to say that, Unit! Thank youuu! Smile But your writing is amazing too, seriously!

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by Unit7 on Sun Jul 04, 2010 4:25 am

pinkcupcake wrote:Okay good xD

Very Happy


Awwww that meant sooo much for you to say that, Unit! Thank youuu! Smile But your writing is amazing too, seriously!

Hmm maybe my short stories/novels, but poetry? Yeah right. Razz

Besides its the truth. Your poetry is amazingly awesome. I love the imagery, the flow, the word usage. Smile *thinks back to his favorite poem of hers* Pink by any chance you still got that one you did about several of us? I don't think I saved a copy of it and I believe the old boards were finally closed. Sad

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by pinkcupcake on Sun Jul 04, 2010 4:33 am

Haha oh fine!! Razz

Aww. And of course! *closes Firefox and goes to desktop, which has a picture from Vamp Diaries on it (hehe) and goes straight to Summer Day*

It shall be posted in a few minutes! xD

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Re: She Walks Forward

Post by Unit7 on Sun Jul 04, 2010 4:42 am

Oh good. Smile

I will be very grateful for this. I just loved that poem. Smile

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